Nathan Fawkes analysis part 2

Today is going to be a little different I'm looking at day 8 video of Schoolisms daily color workouts and I wanted to compare the result that he got with his abstract painting versus my own and see if I can notice some differences. Here is a shot of his end result

What he is aiming for in this piece is unity with variety. This is an exercise in creating unity with variety and he does this by playing with the variables and creating unity in edges, lighting, hue, saturation, and value.

For the edges we can see that he has blurred strokes of the bigger shapes sitting on the background all on the right side of the shapes which are also the direction the light is coming in through. We can also notice that all of the foreground and midground shapes have a certain sway and direction to them. We can also see thsis in the overall composition as the darker bottom left feels the heaviest simply because it is the furthest from the llight source thus being dark.  Whats interesting as well is that he uses the his values to get a nice gradation of greys across the whole image, he neutralized the colors to some extent to make room for the high value light source while at the same time keeping them the same colors that he set out with.

Compared to my own I did not neutralize my values and instead my colors feel out of place with one another. In the black and white version I can see that all 4 of the main shapes fall into 3 different tones. The background itself was ok but it feels too patched together with the top left side feeling like it isnt connectted to the lighter value shape. The foreground image held in the front right is too light in tone to feel like its foreward, but sits akwardly next to a high value shape and a darker background. 

In his color work we can see that he is found of creating bridges of color in his strokes when painting a midground layer onto a background and wanting it to feel like it fits. So what he will do is lose the edge around too shapes and slightly brush them in. I would say he uses a minimum amount of brush strokes here to lose the form where he wants to.  

In mine i did not attempt to unify the values strong enough for it to appear like it was a series of objects that fit together. my shapes are fine and would come together had I lose some edges to blend the ccolors andd blended the background to have a value that is consistent with a lighting scheme. Instead there isn't much of that going on in my image here.